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Old 04-24-2012, 11:36 PM
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You're welcome. I am liking your story!
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Thank you so much. My two essay's are done. So I will probably read what you've written either tonight or tomorrow.
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Thank you so much. My two essay's are done. So I will probably read what you've written either tonight or tomorrow.
Cool! There's quite a bit up, but I am going to be cutting back my screen time. I will post more story after you read what is already up, because I am not sure if anyone else want to read it.
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Cool. I will let you know what I think right after I read it.
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Did you quit this story?
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No I didn't. I was just doing other things today, and I haven't had time to write more if today. I will either tonight or over the weekend.
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Clove teamed up with Cato and some of the other tributes. They were scouring the woods for one's that weren't on their team. Especially Katniss.

"Why do we have to have the blond boy on our team?, asked Cato."

"Because he will lead us to her. I want her dead. I want to win this thing, and make our district proud. So she can beat me in points during a training session. She's not going to beat me here. Not in something I have been training for most of my life., said Clove."

"So you don't want her to go back to District 12?, asked Peeta."

"Oh. She'll be going back alright. But it will be in a body bag."

Peeta didn't like Cloves harsh tones, or the fact that she was talking about killing the woman he loves without a hint of remorse. He also got the feeling that Clove was a little jealous of Katniss, because she wasn't a career tribute, and was still able to out score her. Peeta was teaming up with these sadistic people just so he could have a chance at protecting Katniss.

Clove was with Cato now,and they were noticing fires off in the distance.

"I will go, Cato said." "I want you to be safe, Clove.I can't lose you."

Clove looked back at him, and saw that he was serious. There was a longing for her from him that Clove never knew he felt that way. Her main thing now was to stay alive for him. She spotted movement from the right side of the field. The Capitol called them out for a battle, but also to get what was in the bag. Clove didn't really care about the bag. She just wanted Katniss to show up and to kill her. Clove was moving forward but retreated when she saw it was just the redheaded girl from District 5. No need to worry about her. Clove was staying safe, and just itching to go after one person. And at that moment Katniss showed up.
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More! More! More! But, you should work on punctuation a bit. And your tenses were getting mixed a little again. But I really love the story!!!
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Clove was ecstatic with sadistic joy. This was her one chance to end this girl from District 12 once, and for all. Clove hopped out of her hiding place, and jumped after Katniss knocking her to the ground. Clove had a knife held to Katniss's face.

"Hi, there. Do you really think it was going to be that easy? You will never get away from me. You're all alone. I'm going to kill you tonight, District 12. Where's Lover Boy? Does he still love you? Will he love you when you no longer have a pretty face?"

Clove had the blade of her knife pressed against Katniss's lips.

"I will cut that pretty mouth of yours. Let's see if Lover Boy can kiss you then?"

Katniss was trying to put up a fight, but Clove was still pinning her down.

"Forget it, District 12. We're going to kill you. Just like we did with your pathetic little ally.Or should I say shadow?...what was her name? The one who hopped around in trees? Rue? Well first Rue, then you, and then I think we'll just let nature take care of Lover Boy. How does that sound?"

Just as Clove said this words, she felt two gigantic hands grip her and pull off of the ground.

"What did you say?"

Clove was raised high up in the air. She was terrified. She started screaming out Cato's name.

"I heard you. You killed Rue. And now your trying to kill this girl? What is wrong with you?"

Clove felt her back being slammed into the back of the Cornucopia. She felt a surge of uncomfortable pain go into her body.

"Cato! Cato, she screamed."

There was no answer. Maybe he was too far away to hear her. She kept being embodied with pain, because the guy kept slamming her repeatedly against the Cornucopia. She saw the big hands coming towards her, but that wasn't all. There was also a stone present, and it went straight towards her face, and that was the last thing Clove remembered seeing.

Clove awoke, and thought she escaped death. But this wasn't the green grass or trees she was surrounded by before. There was nothing but puffy curly white objects around her, and from what she could tell they were very light. A bright light appeared out of nowhere. Memories were playing before Cloves eyes. She saw things that she hadn't seen in years. It was all too much for her. She started to break down and cry. She figured out this is where you go when you die. Clove felt an arm place itself on her shoulder. A man with a long white beard and a booming voice spoke:

"Come my child. Tarry not. We do not punish one's soul here."

"Where am I?, Clove asked."

"You're in the tunnel to the land beyond. It's a most glorious place."

"But I thought you had to be sin free to get in?"

"The Almighty doesn't leave one out in the cold. It's a transformation everyone goes through when the time comes."

"So this is what it's like? There aren't any long lines, are there?"

"No,child. Everyone is able to go through when they are ready. Just be sure you are, because once you pass, there is no going back."

Clove was sure she was ready, and an image of her body all bloodied and bruised came before her. She nodded, and the old man showed her the way. Clove walked through and a peace came over her. Her grandparents we're there. Tears started to drop from her eyes. Her body may be a shell now, but she was whole and pure here. She started to confess that she was shower for all the hurt she had done.

"We know, Grandaughter.It is alright now. We forgive you. The Capitol is partly to blame, because they forced this upon people."

Clove was happy to see her grandfather smiling before her. And she saw sitting in a chair a man with a brown beard, and her got up and started to speak.

"Clove you are loved and safe in the "House of God" now. No harm can come to you here. You have repaid yourself, and claimed your purity by going through your whole life in the tunnel. Now it is time to be alive eternally."

Clove held out her hand, and began to cry. She was so happy that she couldn't fully comprehend why. There was no fear here. No death. No war. No crime. Just love. It may be the end of Clove's Earthly life. But her eternal one has just begun.
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More! More! More! But, you should work on punctuation a bit. And your tenses were getting mixed a little again. But I really love the story!!!
Thanks for the feedback. I need to work on getting things correct. But we learn all the time, and hopefully my full stories will be better once I get published. I have seen where I can improve. It's all about learning, and I will become better at it.
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