Two Unlikely Companions

[Crimson]

This is a story I just made up...i'll write more each day till the story is finished. It's based on LOTR

Lianna, an elf of Mirkwood Forest in Middle-Earth sat in her bed one night wondering what else was in the world. Her mother and Father never let her go outside her home. She always was a strange elf, never fitting in with school. She dreamed of Adventures, battles and horse back-riding. She had one great and dearest friend her deep, pure black horse, Mystery. She had him since he was a foal. So one night Lianna went out to the stable and saddled up Mystery. She was leaving home to see the world, to explore it no matter what her parents or older brother said. She rode out in the dead of night. She traveled a couple of weeks and she arrived at a sign that read "The Shire" Suddenly she heard a voice behind her. "Good morin' and welcome stranger!" Lianna turned around in the Saddle and there was a small, fat hobbit. "Good morining to you too" Lianna said. "You must be a hobbit...right?" she asked. "Of course and you must be an elf! Iv'e always wanted to meet an elf!" He replied in a excitited voice.

" You see I have no where to stay..." began Lianna. "Oh bless me!" exclaimed the Hobbit "you may stay with me if you like" "Oh i'd love to thank you very much!" replied Lianna. "I am Babaloo" said the Hobbit. "And I am Lianna" Mystery snorted in reply to say hello to Babaloo. "And this is my horse Mystery" Mystery gave a little neigh and stamped his foot. "He wont bite me...will he?" asked Babaloo in a nervous voice. "Of course not!" Lianna laughed. So all 3 of them walked down the road towards Babaloo's home. Babaloo and Lianna became great friends, she stayed there for many days and then departed to look at other lands in Middle-Earth. "I'll vist you again, Babaloo," Lianna said "I promise". Her and Mystery then rode off, searching for the next land.

[Crimson]

ah will no one read my story :(

[Crimson]

Part 2:

After a couple of more weeks of traveling, Lianna arrived at Gondor, The City of Kings. It was a beautifl white city called Minas Tirith. Osgiliath was the Captail of Gondor. She rode down thru the city gates, reaching to get the the top. She came to the top and asked permission to speak to the Steward of Gondor, there was no King yet, the lost king of Gondor. The Steward was glad to have her here and gave her a lovely room and Mystery a homely stable. Lianna was in the stable in the late night with Mystery. A man walked in a Knight of Gondor who had dark black hair and deep dark eyes. He was wearing bright silver armour with a plate of Gondor's symbol on it, a White Tree.

"Hello, and what is your name?" asked the Knight. "I am Lianna, elf of Mirkwood. And who are you" Lianna asked. "I am Emeron, Knight of Gondor, Guard of the Citadel of Gondor. Why are you all the way here? In the Realm of Men? Shouldn't you be in some Elven Land?" Emeron said. "I wanted to see the world...but my Mother and Father never let me." "Ah you must be very brave for doing this alone" Emeron said with a smile. "Yes, well I should be getting to bed.... Lianna said Good night, Emeron it was nice meeting you" "It was nice meeting you to, Lianna Elf of Mirkwood" Lianna crept back up to her room and had a peaceful night sleep. The next morning Lianna had a lovely breakfast in The Hall. She met Emeron again while dining. He offered to show her around Minas Tirith and of course she said he could.

They had a glorious day. Emeron was very kind to Lianna, not like most men and women in the City who didnt like Elves. But Emeron said to Lianna "Do not bother with these people who do not respect the Elves, I love elves and always wanted to meet one. Wisest of all the beings." Lianna said nothing but smiled back at him. Lianna stayed 2 weeks at Gondor and her and Emeron became best friends. On the morning she told Emeron she had to leave Gondor he was very sad and said "Do not leave please, I may never get to see you again" "You will see me again I promise you Emeron" Lianna said. He embraced her before she left and said "I love you, Lianna"

Sorry if it sounds corny with the love and all...but this is how i wrote it. I'll write more soon

[Bloom]

WHAT A GREAT STROY TRUENARNIAN! it's one of the best stories i've had ever read! u know...u should start writing a book! and PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ PLZ CONTIUE IT!!!!!! i bet ull b a great auther one day! just like C.S.Lewis!

[Crimson]

thanks Bloom!! i was thinking about writing a book about it when i got older...but put way more detail in it :)

[DeplorableWord]

I really like it! It sounds really good, I hope you continue it. But instead of double posting and spamming, you should wait more than 30 minutes before replying... just post more of your story, like you did! Great job again!!! :D

[Bloom]

thanks Bloom!! i was thinking about writing a book about it when i got older...but put way more detail in it :)no offence but u kind of should like...discribe how the place and how the characters look like more. u know wat i mean right? im not trying to be rude or anything. :o but in other words, ur discribing is pretty good for sumone that's 13! :D

[Crimson]

yea i should have described them better..like this...

Lianna: Elf of Mirkwood, Long brown hair and brown eyes, Archery and good horse-rider.

Emeron: Black hair and black eyes, knight of gondor
Babaloo: Fat hobbit, curly brown hair
Mystery: Pure black horse, him and Lianna can 'speak' to each other
Parents: Barely in the story
Brother: I'll tell name later..he comes on the story later on

And if i did write a book about it i would change the name of places, i dont wanna copy Tolkien's work, I made up the charatcers

[susan_rocks_17]

lol dude m8 thats best story iv read ^_^ and thats not many*jks*i think you and my sis would be good friends she wrights potery^_^so yah man keep it up@_@






mike brady ft.wayen.indiana
p.s.
rock hard live long
and
the world will be urs

[Crimson]

i will, i'll write the 3rd part later...the whole story has about 6 parts..i dont wanna make it too long or too short

[Crimson]

Heres part 3!!

Part 3 of Two Unlikely Companions

The next land that Lianna that Lianna came upon was Lothlorien, an Elven Place that was close by Mirkwood. She daren't go back towards Mirkwood for fear that someone from her family might see her. She did an awful thing when she was at the crossroads of Mirkwood and Lothlorien. An elf who knew Lianna said to her at the crossroads "Why Lianna! Where have you been all this time? Your family is worried sick! They would be glad to hear I saw you!" Without a moment to lose Lianna whispered "Sorry" and took her bow out and shot the Elf till he fell down. If her family knew where she was and why she left home they would be searching everywhere for her. So she took the road to Lorien and there met The Queen of all Elves, Galadriel Lady of The Golden Wood. She greeted Lianna and asked "But where do you come from, my dear elf?" "I come from Rivendell" replied Lianna. "Ah Rivendell another beautiful Elven home" said Galadriel in a merry voice "well i'll get one of my servants to show you to a luxiroius room and your horse and nice and fit stable" "Thanks you, your Majesty" said Lianna with a curtsie and left the room with one of Galadriel's servants.

On the following days Lianna spent in Lorien she learned of a horrible problem. Mirkwood and Lorien were at War, Lorien was accusing Mirkwood of stealing goods from them, medchine, food and gold and such. "This can't be true, milady" Lianna was saying to Lady Galadriel one fine summer morning. "Mirkwood can't be stealing!" "But how is everything being gone and used?" said Galadriel with a horrible and nasty expression on her face. Lianna being a little bit afraid of her said "Because all these Elven lands, Rivendell, Lorien and Mirkwood made a pact that they would always be at each others aid at war and never lie to them and not steal, Mirkwood would not break this promise." The Lady Galadriel was about to speak but apprently changed her mind. Lianna without waiting for The Queen's reply left the room. "Mystery we gotta get out of here soon..." Lianna said speaking softly to Mystery in the stable "we must help Mirkwood." Mystery did a quiet whinny as a response to his Master.

[inkspot]

Yikes! Did Lianna just murder an elf of her acquaintance because he said her parents would be happy to know she was okay? That's pretty extreme. If she's to be the heroine of the story, I don't think I would have her kill any innocent person right off.

[Crimson]

Yikes! Did Lianna just murder an elf of her acquaintance because he said her parents would be happy to know she was okay? That's pretty extreme. If she's to be the heroine of the story, I don't think I would have her kill any innocent person right off.

wells it my story, thats just how it is, she didnt want her parents to know where she was cuz then they would force her to come home and she still wanted to all the lands of Middle-Earth, i wish more ppl would read my story...only like 3 ppl have :( everyone's else's story has like alot of peeps reading it!

[Crimson]

i will be writing parts 4 & 5 maybe tomorrow, and plz can more ppl read my story..i feel like no one likes it

[Tirian of Narnia]

Uhh, maybe the Elf that saw Lianna could maybe join her on her travles or somthing like that. :)

[Crimson]

Part 4:

Lianna still stayed in Lorien for a few days, she had to stop this war between Mirkwood and Lorien. "What am I to do?" she said to herself one night in her bed. She learned that many people were dying in Mirkwood and they were very, very unhappy. So every morning Lianna took some supplies, medchine, clothing and food and brought it to Mirkwood, leaving it by the gate. One day Galadriel called Lianna to come and speak to her. "Lianna, I have heard strange things about you" said The Lady Galadriel. "I don't know what you mean..." began Lianna. "Silence!" boomed Galadriel in a horrible voice. "Let me finish first. One of my elves told me they saw you giving supplies to Mirkwood, is this true?" Lianna did not answer but looked at the ground in silence. "Because if it is...there are consequences. "Milady" began Lianna "I know and I dont care! What your doing is wrong! Elven against Elves , killing each other! It's just not right!" Galadriel stared at Lianna in silence. "Your just killing your own people" said Lianna with tears in her eyes as she left the room. Galadriel sat there deep in thought, pondering on what Lianna had said.

That night Lianna sent a messanger to Rivendell to inform Lord Elrond, King of Rivendell of this war of Mirkwood and Lorien. He replied back to her and said "I shall help you, brave elf. I will get Galadriel back into her senses. I sense danger and evil in Lorien" Lianna rejoiced when she got his reply. So In about a week a small army from Rivendell came with Lord Elrond in the front. Elrond immediatly went to speak with Galadriel. Lianna listened..."Lady" began Elrond "stop this madness, you it is wrong""No! I will not listen to you...Lianna the elf is lying" said Galadriel. "I know evil is afoot here" said Elrond "its Saruman, I know he is controlling you" And then in a loud voice Lord Elrond said "Saruman! Stop posioning the mind of this Elven Queen and leave her right now!" There was a shreik and Galadriel fell on the ground. "I understand now..." began Galadriel "Saruman was using me to kill all the elves, so he wouldn't have to send an army to kill them instead, Thank you, my lord" "Dont thank me" said Elrond "Thank Lianna.

"Thank you Lianna of Rivendell" said Galadriel before Lianna was ready to leave Lorien "you saved us all, for informing Elrond about this foolish war." "im really from Mirkwood" said Lianna with a laugh. "Goodbye, Millady and Lord Elrond" said Lianna "Yah, Mysetry!" Lianna said as her and Mystery gallopped away from The Golden Wood.

[Crimson]

Part 5: (nearly done with the story)

As Lianna rode off in the woods going to her next destanation she was thinking about Emeron and Babaloo, how she promised she would vist them again. She thought to herself "Should I go see them again? But who first" In about two weeks to be precise she came upon Gondor to vist Emeron. She spotted Emeron guarding The White Tree of Gondor. She had to wait to speak with him, for as one knows it is rude to speak to someone when one is on duty. The steward welcomed her again and this time she met the Steward's son, Faramir Captain of Gondor. He was very polite to her and Mystery and said "Today is the great horse race in Gondor, you may enter if you wish Lianna". "Oh i shall, it will be very exciting for Mystery and I." So Lianna signed up for it and this is when something dreadful happended to her. They were all preparing for the race some hours later and when they set out Lianna and Mystery fell to the ground, for someone had bumped into her on purpose "that will show you to get ahead of me, Elf!" as the rider sped off.

Lianna could only lay there in grass, hearing voices laughing and making fun of her. She saw Faramir running towards her and he helped her up. "I'm sorry" he said "ignore the people" Lianna did not have anything to say as she and Faramir and Mystery walked away from the race. Emeron was watching the race and saw Lianna fall. He ran through the crowd and caught up with Faramir and Lianna "Lianna are you all right? I saw you fall off your horse" said Emeron with an anxious look on his face. "Im fine" said Lianna in a quivering voice "I wasnt hurt." "Well if these people are being mean to you...why don't you leave Gondor, Lianna?" said Emeron. Lianna just stared up into his face with tears in her eyes. "Don't say such things!" snapped Faramir "she can stay here as long as she likes" "No...im afraid I cannot" said Lianna trying not to cry as she swung up into Mystery's saddle and left Gondor forever.

[Crimson]

Part 6:

Lianna travels were nearly at an end. She promised Babaloo that she would visit him again, one last time. So the next place Lianna wanted to head for was The Shire, after she visited him one last time she would make for The Grey Havens. The Grey Havens is a place where you can take a boat and sail, sail out of Middle-Earth. Many Elves were leaving Middle-Earth to let men rule it so she decided she would do that, instead of returning to her family, she would feel like a fool if she did so. It took Lianna three weeks to get to The Shire from Gondor, she never forgot what Faramir did for her, not laughing at her and she never forgot Emeron. She was at The Shire at last. It took her quite awhile to find Babaloo’s home, but she remembered that he had a bright blue door with a shining gold knob. She knocked and out came Babaloo. “Lianna!” he cried, reaching to embrace her “I knew you wouldn’t forget your promise!” “Of course not Babaloo” said Lianna with a smile and embracing him back “you’re my best friend” “Well then come in my house at once!” said Babaloo with a smile “and good to you again too Mystery” Mystery neighed and stamped his foot.

Lianna told Babaloo all about her plans to leave for The Grey Havens soon. “But…but..don’t go..” began Babaloo “I’ll miss you Lianna” he said looking down at the floor, trying to fight back the tears. “And I shall miss you also Babaloo” said Lianna, trying to smile. “I wanted to give you this” she said as she drew out an Elven brooch. “Take it” she said handing it to him “to remember me by” “But” said Babaloo taking the brooch “You just can’t give me this….” But Lianna interrupted him and said “No, you keep it. It was mine from Lorien, but you deserve something special, after all you can brag to the other Hobbits that an elf gave you this brooch” she said with a smile and laughing. Babaloo laughed also. She spent a week at Babaloo’s home, but something tragic happened. “Lianna!!” cried Babaloo one day running up to Lianna while she was looking at his garden. “Orcs!! Orcs!!” cried Babaloo “attacking the shire! Help us please!” Without a word Lianna jumped onto Mystery and ran towards the orcs. She took her bow out and began to strike some down. Other hobbits were there fighting also. All of a sudden, Lianna fell of Mystery, for Mystery got shot by an arrow. Lianna kept her head and kept fighting, just thinking he got a mere wound. “Mystery!” Lianna yelled after the battle was over. She searched thru a crowd of wounded hobbits, crying hobbits mourning over the dead. But when Lianna found Mystery he was lying dead with two arrows in his side. “Mystery….” Said Lianna stooping down to hug her friend. “Don’t…don’t go” Babaloo quietly came over and bent down to stroke Mystery’s mane. “I’m so sorry.” Said Babaloo, trying to comfort Lianna.


I have one last part, it wraps up the story. I hope you’ve enjoyed it so far

[Crimson]

Part 7: Final Part

After Mystery’s death Lianna was considering whether or not to still go on to the Grey Havens. They burned Mystery’s body that night. “Babaloo, I must depart from you soon” Lianna said to Babaloo one day. “I’m not even going to try to stop you” said Babaloo “it is your decision. Lianna smiled at her friend. “But you’ll need a steed” said Babaloo. “I know a friend of mine who will give me one” So later on in the day Lianna and Babaloo walked down to Babaloo’s friend’s house and got a pure white horse named FastWind. Lianna stayed one more day at Babaloo’s and still thought about Mystery everyday. When her departure came to leave Babaloo she said “Don’t forget me. A Hobbit and an elf being best friends.” She said with a laugh. “I won’t ever forget you” he said with tears in his eyes and embracing Lianna for his very last time. He watched Lianna walk off with FastWind and whispered to himself “take care, my friend” and walked inside his Hobbit Hole.

Lianna was not going to The Grey Havens like she said, she was going back to MirkWood, to live with her family. It took her five weeks to travel back there and when she got Home she was utterly shocked and filled with despair. Her family left, to go to The Grey Havens. The house they lived in had a sign on the door that read “Property of Lianna of Mirkwood; House not for Sale” she took that off the door and there was something on the back it read “Dear Lianna, we knew you would come back home. We left to go The Grey Havens, but don’t bother to come, there will be no more ships taking Elves there, we got on the last one. But live here and always, always remember us. From Your Family” Lianna did not weep or cry but she went into the house and remembered all her adventures she had. Often in the summer she would sit outside and remember Babaloo, Emeron her Family and…Mystery.

THE END

I got an idea for this story, becuz I used to role play lotr and one day I was watching ROTK and saw an elf at aragorn’s coronation that I really liked. I gave her a name and role played as her and never told anyone, iv’e had this RPG elf for about 2 years and no one in my family knows about it. My RPG is much more exciting, I only put a little bit of my adventures in there, you can see Lianna if you watch aragorn’s coronation and when he is greeting Legolas there is an elf behind Legolas on his right hand, she has long brown hair and is wearing a white dress I think.

What would you rate my story? On a scale from 1-10, 1 being the poorest and 10 being the greatest. I would love to hear your thoughts

[Tirian of Narnia]

I'd rate it a five. the whole killing an elf thing just doesn't make to much sence and you should have put more detail into your story, but I can see you have a wonderfull picture painted in your head, you just need some help with the writing style. :)

[Crimson]

I'd rate it a five. the whole killing an elf thing just doesn't make to much sence and you should have put more detail into your story, but I can see you have a wonderfull picture painted in your head, you just need some help with the writing style. :)

...help with the writing style...like ur story is any better, Tirian! :mad:

[Lost Dreamer]

hey, whoa, Tiran that wasnt very nice. You said 'i'd like to hear what you have to say'...dont say that unless ur prepared for critiscism.
True narnain was doign whats called 'constructive critisism'; its pointing out things in your story that you can improve, and make better. and he/she had some good points. if i were you i'd go over and look at it because he/she (sorry True narnian :o ) was right. and true narnian complimenteed you, too. Next time be prepared for critisism.
and seriously, if i offended you im sorry. im just trying to state facts.

[Crimson]

hey, whoa, Tiran that wasnt very nice. You said 'i'd like to hear what you have to say'...dont say that unless ur prepared for critiscism.
True narnain was doign whats called 'constructive critisism'; its pointing out things in your story that you can improve, and make better. and he/she had some good points. if i were you i'd go over and look at it because he/she (sorry True narnian :o ) was right. and true narnian complimenteed you, too. Next time be prepared for critisism.
and seriously, if i offended you im sorry. im just trying to state facts.

im the author of the story...

[Tirian of Narnia]

Yeah, I'm sorry if I offended you, it really was a nice story, and well, I'm sorry. :(

[Crimson]

Yeah, I'm sorry if I offended you, it really was a nice story, and well, I'm sorry. :(

i just dont like it when ppl say my writing style is bad...Princess Bloom/Qeen Susan said she loved my writing style and said i was a really good author..but then u say 'oh work on ur writing style'

[Lost Dreamer]

umm, sorry about my post above. i got ur guys' names mixed up. True Narnian, u do have a pretty good writing style. but theres everyones style needs toutching up, working on, ect. If you want to be a real writer you will ahve to learn to take critisism; you'll get iot. everyon does. sometimes the people meant to help, sometimes they are just ebing rude. you have to take what they say and use it for your benift; improving yourself. i know Tiran wastn trying to upset you...and yes, it is your story. but if you wnat others to like it, then sometimes you have to tweak it. I have.
and again, i hope you dont take any offense. :)

[Tirian of Narnia]

I noticed the title and I have a question, who are the two unlikely companions, Lianna and Emeron, Lianna and babaloo, or lianna and mystery? :confused:

[Crimson]

I noticed the title and I have a question, who are the two unlikely companions, Lianna and Emeron, Lianna and babaloo, or lianna and mystery? :confused:

Lianna & Mystery.....i was gonna make it be "The Elf and The Horse"

[Tirian of Narnia]

Ok, thanks. :)

[Crimson]

whelp..it looks like no one else will read this story anymore, ive seen alot of ppl writing story and aton of ppl loved it

[Bloom]

yea i should have described them better..like this...

Lianna: Elf of Mirkwood, Long brown hair and brown eyes, Archery and good horse-rider.

Emeron: Black hair and black eyes, knight of gondor
Babaloo: Fat hobbit, curly brown hair
Mystery: Pure black horse, him and Lianna can 'speak' to each other
Parents: Barely in the story
Brother: I'll tell name later..he comes on the story later on

And if i did write a book about it i would change the name of places, i dont wanna copy Tolkien's work, I made up the charatcers
yeah like that! i can picture it better.

[Bloom]

I RATE IT 999,999,999!!!!!! WAT A GREAT STORY!!! THE END MADE ME CRY!! SERIOUSLY! IM FULL WITH TEARS RIGHT NOW! WAT A GREAT STORY ONE OF THE BEST I'VE EVER HEARD! :D ANY1 HAS A HANKERCHIFF? :confused: i really need it.

[Bloom]

ill tell sum of my freinds about ur great story! i don't think there's anything wrong with it. i like it just the way it is:D

[Crimson]

thanks Bloom!! :) best freind ive ever had!:)

[Bloom]

thx! ur 1 of my bestest friends too! i might be far away from u, but u r a great friend urself!

[Crimson]

thanks...well someone likes my story

[Bloom]

thanks...well someone likes my story
i don't just like it, I LOVE IT!

[Lúthien Evenstar]

Good Story :) You should have a sequel. lol

[~PrincessStella~]

hi u guys im doing this to meet everyone

[Crimson]

? what did u enjoy my story.

[QueenSusanofNarnia]

I liked it.

[Crimson]

thanks QueenSusanOfNarnia!

[Crimson]

i was thinking about posting a short story about Lianna, i am writing like my own little book about it and i did the 1st chapter. maybe ill post the 1st chapter and thats it on here, its really good, it tells way more about Lianna family and its a totally differnt world, theres no LOTR>.

[Tirian of Narnia]

Sounds cool. You should post it.

[Crimson]

i will soon, its way better.

[Crimson]

im gonna write more soon!! another story! and Lianna is in my siggy! ill get pics. of all the charatcers soon!

[Bloom]

u should do it. itll sound really cool!

[Octesian]

Yea! I LIKED IT ALOT! YES DEFINATLY POST YOUR OTHER STORY!

[Crimson]

tthanks!! I thought this story got kinda pushed aside..

[Bloom]

tthanks!! I thought this story got kinda pushed aside..
no way! it's still popular! and so cute! u really write great stories!!! :D

[Crimson]

hehhe...:o thanks Bloom

[Bloom]

hehhe...:o thanks Bloomur welcome :D and it IS true!

[Wylla]

wells it my story, thats just how it is, she didnt want her parents to know where she was cuz then they would force her to come home and she still wanted to all the lands of Middle-Earth, i wish more ppl would read my story...only like 3 ppl have :( everyone's else's story has like alot of peeps reading it!


I really like your story!! i read parts 1 and 2 yesterday and i liked em, but then before io could post about em i had to get off. Anyway, don't worry that peeps aren't reading your story i'm shure more will come soon enough!:)

[Crimson]

lol. thanks..I thought this thread had died :D

[Bloom]

lol. thanks..I thought this thread had died :D
well, something good never dies...